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What's your line?

Krohe
We all have favorite lines from our work, but can you pick one all-time fave? No, really--ONE line. No more. Here's mine; its from A Time Never Lived:


No wings crested these landbound creatures of mountain core and ice; they were big-boned instead of hollowed, bulky instead of sleek, beasts of
burden like household servants, and not the stuff of kings.

What's yours?

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queenoftheskies
Jan. 20th, 2014 07:20 pm (UTC)
Nice.

I had to go think about what line I liked best from my work and come back. I think it's this line, though I'm not sure it'll actually end up in the final novel:

Midnight hit the streets with a crackle of energy that sent sparks sizzling through the Denny’s sign on the corner and set off every car alarm on the block.

Edited at 2014-01-20 07:35 pm (UTC)
bogwitch64
Jan. 20th, 2014 07:49 pm (UTC)
Thank you, but what's YOURS?
queenoftheskies
Jan. 20th, 2014 07:57 pm (UTC)
I had to think about it for a few minutes, so I went back and added it after I decided. :)
bogwitch64
Jan. 20th, 2014 08:09 pm (UTC)
Excellent! Thanks!
cmcmck
Jan. 20th, 2014 07:52 pm (UTC)
Being a poet, I'm not sure it works in quite the same way. You'd have to tell me! :o)
bogwitch64
Jan. 20th, 2014 07:54 pm (UTC)
Don't you have one line that you love more than most? The one that, whenever you read it, you have a moment of self-love only the perfect words can create?
cmcmck
Jan. 21st, 2014 08:00 am (UTC)
I'll know it when I write it! :o)

But of recent stuff, I guess this from last year- the third stanza particularly:

Freak Storm


Sun streamed window upon leaving
For another long day of toil.
Cobbling across the Grossmarkt
By the Belfort belling nine.
Goedemorgen to friends.

Then of a sudden it came-
Sky blue black raced in
Lightning frets silver filigree
Fat, heavy splash of raindrops
Warm and wet as blood.

The sky dark satanic plum.
Short sharp thundershatter
Then the bright blue back
Blue as a sparrow's egg
And the smell of drying

Spring storm soon stilled
Scene of sundrying
Scent of earth and tree
Refreshed and cleansed,
Shine and slick of cobbles.

The gutters gurgle gladly
Downpipe music mingles
With the treedrip opera.
Damp earth's rich smell-
Gastronomically intense.

(c) Marianna 2013



Edited at 2014-01-21 11:45 am (UTC)
harvey_rrit
Jan. 20th, 2014 08:43 pm (UTC)
Ending of SOUL SURVIVOR:

Jann began lathering him. "We could afford the down payment on that place in Colorado," she said. "Bring in the equipment from here."
He shook his head. "I told them when I turned them down, I am not a professional refurbisher. And anyway, if it's such a great resort why'd they wait so long? It must have been gutted sixty-five years ago. They should have either rebuilt or sold right after the fire."
"I've been asking around. —Your back's ready to rinse, turn. —They tried," she said, starting to soap his chest. "Nobody ever finished the job. Seven different contractors paid their penalties and split."
"From a mountaintop?" (The penalty clauses would have been mild next to lost time and moving expenses.) "What's wrong with the place?"
"It's haunted," she said, watching his face as she soaped.
He looked at her for a long moment. "How bad?" he finally said.
She shrugged. "Couple hundred at least. Killed some people." A faint smile developed on her face. "Oughta fill a few weekends."
He gave her a look of skeptical amusement. "When do the owners expect us?"
"The fifteenth." She looked down at her hands. "Am I to employ this, sir?"
"I dunno. Are there any openings it might fit?"
"I believe I'll try it in all of them and see what position it's best suited for. —So, are we going?"
"Of course."

Somewhere, high in the Rockies, a ghost shivered.

Edited at 2014-01-20 08:45 pm (UTC)
bogwitch64
Jan. 20th, 2014 08:50 pm (UTC)
Is Soul Survivor yours? And which of those lines is your fave? Is it the last one?
harvey_rrit
Jan. 21st, 2014 04:01 am (UTC)
It is mine; it was recommended for a Nebula, but not enough people read Baen's Universe to get it onto the ballot.

The last one, yes. It does require the buildup.

EDIT: The ending is meant to imply the Overlook Hotel from THE SHINING. Kevin Ridler is...

...Hm.

PM me your email if you want to read it. It takes some describing.

Edited at 2014-01-21 04:05 am (UTC)
readthisandweep
Jan. 21st, 2014 04:19 pm (UTC)
IMV a truly beautiful sentence requires no build-up.

I would have been more than happy to read, as a stand alone sentence:

Somewhere, high in the Rockies, a ghost shivered.

It's lovely.
bogwitch64
Jan. 21st, 2014 04:43 pm (UTC)
Oh...ditto! You know, until Carol separated it like that, I didn't appreciate the beauty of that one line. Lovely!
harvey_rrit
Jan. 21st, 2014 05:33 pm (UTC)
8.

Me neither. I'm too bound up in the whole story.
harvey_rrit
Jan. 21st, 2014 05:33 pm (UTC)
Thank you. I was too invested in the whole story to get that.
readthisandweep
Jan. 21st, 2014 05:36 pm (UTC)
You're welcome! And I get it. ;)
bogwitch64
Jan. 21st, 2014 05:44 pm (UTC)
Sometimes, all you need is a step back to be able to appreciate things. :)
msstacy13
Jan. 20th, 2014 09:55 pm (UTC)
Too weak to shiver as the utter cold of death filled him, he remembered that warm and beautiful summer day when he had set out to search for his father’s donkeys, and wondered how much happier he might have been if he had simply waited for them to come home.
bogwitch64
Jan. 20th, 2014 10:56 pm (UTC)
LOVE! It says so much, so beautifully.
seaivy
Jan. 21st, 2014 04:54 am (UTC)
four stanzas but the last line of each
Let the seed within you grow
bogwitch64
Jan. 21st, 2014 03:49 pm (UTC)
Lovely. Thanks for sharing!
peadarog
Jan. 21st, 2014 09:28 am (UTC)
I haven't written my favourite line yet ;)
bogwitch64
Jan. 21st, 2014 04:01 pm (UTC)
But you have written something that IS your favorite right now, no?

(You spelled favorite wrong. There's no U in it. hehehehehee!)
peadarog
Jan. 21st, 2014 04:05 pm (UTC)
It's not me. It's u.
readthisandweep
Jan. 21st, 2014 02:03 pm (UTC)
As she stepped onto the bus, she brushed his cheek with a kiss and slipped a dove’s feather into his pocket.
readthisandweep
Jan. 21st, 2014 02:09 pm (UTC)
It's a favourite - it's fresh & current. I want to behave (I love this post) but have to say, it's impossible to choose one... ;)
bogwitch64
Jan. 21st, 2014 04:02 pm (UTC)
I have many lines I love, but the above is my favorite of all. There's just something of the rhythm of it.
readthisandweep
Jan. 21st, 2014 04:54 pm (UTC)
Yes - I see that. And it is a great line! :)
bogwitch64
Jan. 21st, 2014 04:02 pm (UTC)
Beautiful. Thank you, darling.
nineteen68
Jan. 21st, 2014 11:32 pm (UTC)
"Because I'm your friend, asshole."
bogwitch64
Jan. 21st, 2014 11:52 pm (UTC)
I love it! Very you.
nineteen68
Jan. 23rd, 2014 08:47 pm (UTC)
*grin*
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